wrote a haiku for spring today

[Telepod]

Poor little flowers--
They bloom and die so quickly!
Trees see us that way.
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I was walking past a flowering bush which had just begun to bloom last week; already the ground beneath it was strewn with wilted petals. I thought this to myself spontaniously, then realized it was a haiku. What a wonderful scent those flowers had...

 

[Lucky420]

Nice

 

[tragic1]

That was cool Telepod.

 

[Number]

That put a damn nice grin on my face.

 

[HellBoy]

..ohhh... nice one Telepod!

..ohhh... nice one Telepod!

..goody!.... let me try one..

Blades of Green Gold
Soft rain and warm sunshine
The promise of spring!

..it's an experience!

 

[NOKUY]

ill try one too:

This thread was old
bored out of my fuking gord
now to get high


anyone else wanna try?

 

[HellBoy]

NOKUY ..not fer nuttin but... that isn't a Haiku! Almost and it's kinda cool too.. but you have to conform to some construction standards to qualify.

The basic standard is the fact that the verse form must follow a strict code of structure involving SYLLABLES of the words used..

Line one: 5 syllables
Line two: 7 syllables
Line three: 5 syllables

..also, some mention of the current season is also worked in by the 'masters' as it is a more none formal requirement... but, as far as popular use goes.. is not always seen.

I look to the sky
Fearing the summer rains
My garden is drowned

 

[HellBoy]

well dammit... I spent a half hour trying to figure out how to put in an image... screw it!! Clik the link if ya wanna see my reaction to this unbelievable flooding in Texas!!!

 

[easyskanking]

I like how you said "Trees view us that way."
they probably do.

 

[FallenBuddha]

last cicada's song
droning in the warm suns face
new spawn burrows deep

peace -fb

 

[NOKUY]

NOKUY ..not fer nuttin but... that isn't a Haiku! Almost and it's kinda cool too.. but you have to conform to some construction standards to qualify.

The basic standard is the fact that the verse form must follow a strict code of structure involving SYLLABLES of the words used..

Line one: 5 syllables
Line two: 7 syllables
Line three: 5 syllables

..also, some mention of the current season is also worked in by the 'masters' as it is a more none formal requirement... but, as far as popular use goes.. is not always seen.

I look to the sky
Fearing the summer rains
My garden is drowned

hey thanks for the lesson "hellboy"

I remember the lesson from like 3rd grade, and i was aware of the 7/5/7 on syllables. (I somehow miscalculated lines 1 and 3 and only hit 4 syllables each...lol)

I wasn't aware of the "masters'" use of "current season" recognition tho.

let me try again...hehe:

now it is summer
the hot brutal sun beats down
can't wait for winter


ok 1 more w/out the "masters" touch:

george bush is a cock
how has he not yet been shot
such a fuking tool

 

[HellBoy]

Excellent NOKUY!! .. a very quick study you are... ..AND you nailed TWO seasons in the summer winter one!

LOL!!! .. and the second is more contemporary!!!
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FallenBudda... very nice! ..and tuned to the current seasonal events without actual mention. It contains a quiet beaty of nature that is difficult to capture w/ just 17 syllables to work with...

...Telepod also captured that quiet beauty of nature... very nice!!

I dig well done haikus!!:up:

 

[BakedBeans]

I've been loving the Texas drench, all of the lakes are finally FULL!

Too bad it's getting hot again... I have nothing in the ground, but I have babies that have been getting acclimated. I really hope it doesn't get TOO hot this year.


bb

 

[HellBoy]

star light, star so bright

Light my path this lonely night

winter of my soul